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2022-11-04

主動語氣VS被動語氣,效果大不同!如何用英文委婉地宣布「壞消息」?邊種語氣較適合?

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  要宣布壞消息點算好?在英文書信中,大部分情況下都會使用「主動語氣」來直接描述你想表達的主旨。尤其是在促進產品、服務、活動或業務嘅時候,「主動語氣」能帶來直接和強而有力的感覺。然而,在某些情況下,我們卻必須以較迂迴、委婉的「被動語氣」表達,否則容易讓人有被冒犯與不禮貌的感覺。

 

  在甚麼情況下我們應該使用被動語氣?包括「宣布壞消息」、「推卸責任」或「主詞不重要」時。若在這三種狀況中使用主動語氣(主詞+動詞),會讓對方有不舒服的感覺。相反,使用被動語氣("be" + past participle過去分詞)的話,反而可以産生較中肯與溫和的口氣,既不會造成對方的壓迫感,還可以為你帶來理性與沉穩的形象。

 

  以下是最常使用「被動語氣」的三種狀況,大家不妨試下比較以下三組email在使用被動語氣之後語氣與態度上嘅變化。

 

Situation 1:宣布壞消息

 

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Email 1A:

 

To: fiona@worldcave.com

From: eric@worldcave.com

Subject: Employment status

 

Dear Fiona,

 

Your inability to meet the sales quotas for the past three months is a big problem. I have to terminate終止 your position. November 6th will be your last day. I wish you the very best of luck in your job search.
(在過去三個月,你一直無法達到業績目標。因此,我必須終止你的職務。十一月六日是你上班的最後一天,我們祝你能幸運地找到一份適合你的工作。)

Regards,
Eric

 

***Email 1A使用了主動式語氣,感覺嚴厲而強硬***

 

Email 1B:

To: fiona@worldcave.com

From: eric@worldcave.com

Subject: Employment status

 

Dear Fiona,

 

Unfortunately, the sales quotas 業績目標 were not met. As a result, I'm sorry to be the one to tell you that your position has been terminated終止. This decision will be effective生效 as of November 6th. I wish you the very best of luck in your job search.

 

(很遺憾地,你並未達成業績目標。因此,我很遺憾告訴你你的職務被終止了,這個決定將於十一月六日生效,我們祝你能找到一份適合的工作。)

Regards,
Eric

 

***Email 1B使用了被動式語氣,較中肯及溫和***

 

Email 1A及Email1B出現過的主動句及被動句:

 

●    (主動句1)

Your inability to meet the sales quotas…...

你無法達成業績目標......

●    (被動句1)

The sales quotas were not met.

業績目標沒有達到。

 

●    (主動句2)

I have to terminate your position.

我心須終止你的職務。

●    (被動句2)

Your position has been terminated.

你的職務被終止了。

 

●    (主動句3)

November 16th will be your last day.

十一月六日是你上班的最後一天。

●    (被動句3)

The decision will be effective as of November 16th.

這個決定於十一月六日生效。

 

Situation 2A:規避責任

 

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Email 2A:

To: chelchiu@routeone.com

From: phoebe@routeone.com

Subject: There was an unfortunate incident last night

 

Dear Ms. Chiu,

 

I just want to let you know about an incident that happened last night. I left the door unlocked. As a result, a thief broke into the office and stole $8,500 in cash. We've filed a police report, but the police have no suspects yet.

 

(我想通知你昨天晚上發生的一件事,就是我沒有鎖門,結果小偷闖進辦公室偷走八千五百元。我們已經向警察局備案,不過警方到目前為止還沒有找到嫌疑犯。)

Regards,
Phoebe Lau

 

*** Email 2A 使用了主動式語氣,直接暴露錯誤***

 

Email 2B:

To: chelchiu@routeone.com

From: phoebe@routeone.com

Subject: There was an unfortunate incident last night

Dear Ms. Chiu,

 

I just want to let you know about an incident that happened last night. The door was left unlocked last night. As a result, the office was broken into and $8,500 was stolen in petty cash. We've filed a police report, but the police have no suspects yet.

 

我想通知你昨天晚上發生的一件事,就是昨晚門沒有鎖,結果辦公室被闖空門且被偷走了八千五百元。我們已經向警察局備案,不過警方到目前為止還沒有找到嫌疑犯。

Regards,
Phoebe Lau

 

***Email 2B 使用了被動式語氣, 迂迴規避責任***

 

Email 2A及Email 2B出現過的主動句及被動句:

 

●    (主動句1)

I left the door unlocked.

我沒有鎖門。

●    (被動句1)

The door was left unlocked last night.

昨晚鬥沒有鎖。

 

●    (主動句1)

A thief broke into the office and stole $8,500.

小偷闖進了辦公室還偷了八千五百元。

●    (被動句1)

The office was broken into and $8,500 was stolen.

辦公室被闖空門且被偷走了八千五百元。

 

Situation 3:當主語無關緊要時

 

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Email 3A:

To: karylee@techtrade.com

From: emily@finefur.com

Subject: We received your letter

Dear Ms. Lee,

 

A courier delivered the letter this afternoon. Thank you for sending the letter so quickly. We greatly appreciate it.

(快遞員今天早上已經將信件送達。謝謝你這麼快就寄出信件,我方非常感激。)

Regards,
Emily Hammond

 

*** Email 3A使用了主動式語氣, 易使讀者誤判重點為快遞員。***

 

Email 3B:

To: karylee@techtrade.com

From: emily@finefur.com

Subject: We received your letter

 

Dear Ms. Lee,

 

The letter was delivered this morning. Thank you for sending the letter so quickly. We greatly appreciate it.

(信件已於今早送達。謝謝你這麼快就寄出信件,我方非常感激。)

Regards,
Emily Hammond

 

***Email 3A使用了被動式語氣,不強調快遞員。當原主語無關緊要時,甚至可完全不加以描述。***

 

  電郵所描述的信函(letter)雖然是快遞員(courier)送來的,但對說話者而言,是誰把信送來的並不重要,重要的是說話者要向對方說明有沒有收到信。因此也可以以直接了當的主動式語氣表達「我們收到信了(We received the letter this morning)」。

 

 

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